Hm, I must say I didn't like this as much as your other film.
The intro is genious though! Very very very stylish! Got me into it totally, especially with the very nice drawings and the tales of the crypt like font! That moment I was thinking this is an easy 5 star.
But then, I had quite a hard time watching it cause it was very slow paced. Many parts were simply, blunt said, boring.
Again the acting was very cheesy, especially in the action sequence in the forest. That must have been the must unphysical action scene I have seen on here. The actors did nothing that made it exciting and the choreography was totally dull, same goes for the editing. It all didn't just lack of energy, it didn't have energy at all.
Same goes for the other parts of the film. The camera, the editing, dialogue, acting... all had no real energy. The camera felt like it was just there and the editing wasn't by far as liveley as in your other film.
I did like the basic concept of the script.
The reason this script still fails is because it has a lot of pacing problems. It rests for too long on parts that aren't going anywhere and other parts are too quick or just appear totally random.
That it was cheesy is another point. As it started with a comicstrip it had a right to be cheesy and comiclike. I actually like cheesy films a lot sometimes (just look at mine)
But the way it was set in scene made it bad. It just seemed like the film was taking itself totally serious, allthough wasn't able to deliver seriousness in any parts, wheter filmtechnically, nor in dramaturgy nor in acting... it depended in things that simply weren't there.