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|Gary is a man who once had a problem with insomnia. His doctor prescribed pills to help him sleep, but they have been coming with a price: Now that Gary can sleep, he's haunted by horrible nightmares. Every time Gary dreams, he sees the same man attempting to kill him. Each time, Gary manages to escape just before his demise, but he's becoming more and more worried... the dreams are so vivid that he often cannot tell if he's awake or asleep. And what if the man who is after him is actually real?|
This was a movie made for my Creative Writing final exam this year. It is plagued with certain problems that I am well aware of. The movie itself was filmed in under 5 hours, and fully edited over the course of 1 single night, in which I completely taught myself the use of Chromanator. So I am aware of the masking problems with the Chromy effects, and the acting (at least with a couple characters) is not professional. Given that I'd never used Chromanator before that night, and given the "flash" uber-fast filming schedule, I am actually surprised that this did come out to the level it's at. Not an incredible level by any means, but adequate for my exam grade. Enjoy.
Extra Special Thanks to Greyo for hosting this file.
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Thank you much. And actually, the correlation between the Main Character's name and Gary Wright was entirely unintentional. The movie was originally going to be called "The Cure for Insomnia", but I didn't think it fit well, and it's also already the title of an Andy Worhol movie. I actually didn't notice the name match until now, haha.
Aculag wrote:I loved it. Despite it's low points, it was very interesting, and had a good outcome. I jumped a couple times too. Nice. And good use of effects. Everything else has already been said.
Please tell me the main character was called Gary as an homage to the singer of Dream Weaver...
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Thank you for the congratulatory statement
berlin2232 wrote:First off, congratulations on completeing your movie! But there were a couple areas of concern....
The "tick-tock" of that clock about drove me insane...That's exactly what it is supposed to do.
For a minute there, I was waiting for the psychiatrist to stop talking mid-sentence and look up in anticipation for it to stop.The psychiatrist wasn't supposed to notice anything. It was all Gary who's crazy.
You must have had a really powerful amp hooked up to that bad boy...Nope, just added in post.
It was just too loud and went on too long. Half the time you couldn't hear what was being said and for a moment there I thought that guy was in there because of the tick-tocking...It's supposed to be loud, and yes, the length may have been a tad too long. But as I mentioned earlier, the tick-tock's change was all in Gary's head, and in a way it DOES signal that something just isn't quite right. And then right as it stops, the guy enters.. that's how it's written, that's how it was filmed.
Secondly, you have this character who seems to be able to "get around" via a series of random self-inflicted explosions, which is ok, but why when the victim shoots a fuel tank of some sort and there's this "H U G E" explosion does the tormentor start yelling and screaming as though it hurts?It's important to remember that this whole situation is all a dream... of sorts. Also, the guy who gets hit with a car, shot, blown up and decapitated DOES feel the pain. He BLEEDS. He's knocked out, he reacts with pain to the gunshots, and yes, he's going to scream when he's lit on fire. As for his teleportation, it's more of a mystical self-started explosion that is really only the reaction of matter disappearing from one place to another. That's how I explain it. It's a DREAM, as I said. It's going to require a suspension of disbelief. Do you question the reality of a radioactive spider biting someone and giving him the spider's abilities? Do you question the reality of a luck-dragon named Falcor even existing, let alone being able to speak English? If so, watching movies must be very boring for you.
Your camera shots were off a bit as well. There were times throughout the office visit where you could have relayed the emotional and mental pain of the patient better through a series of close up's and camera rolls. Lighting & sound are factors and would have been able to capture his mental torment and express his frustrations too.This, I do agree with. And given more time, I hopefully would have done that. But I just was at a loss for time and ability.
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It's supposed to be loud, and yes, the length may have been a tad too long. But as I mentioned earlier, the tick-tock's change was all in Gary's head, and in a way it DOES signal that something just isn't quite right.I understand... but it's highly annoying from an audiences' point of view. Scenes like that have to be setup differently so as to convey your message and not drive away viewers that's all I'm saying. You do own Chromanator right? Perhaps if you used some extreme close ups of the second hand on the clock moving in slow motion and also manipulated the "tick-tock" sound a bit, slowed it down and distorted it, give it a deep echo. Then maybe insert some extreme close up cuts of Gary lying down with a cold-sweat on his forehead and quick shifting eyes. Get close ups of the doctors mouth as he speaks, or close up of the doctor writing notes on the tablet, etc, etc.... Put your back into it man!
It's a DREAM, as I said. It's going to require a suspension of disbelief. Do you question the reality of a radioactive spider biting someone and giving him the spider's abilities? Do you question the reality of a luck-dragon named Falcor even existing, let alone being able to speak English? If so, watching movies must be very boring for you.See, now you're twisting things. I understand it's a dream but it still has to make sense to the viewers.
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