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The PB&J

Posted: Mon, 12th Jun 2006, 4:09pm

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A quick little movie made in about 10 or so minutes, the PB&J is a subtle-witted comedic sketch that is sure to draw a couple of laughs.

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Posted: Tue, 13th Jun 2006, 4:58pm

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Now this is quite amusing. I don't know whether this and The Baby are meant to be in the same league, but while this is abstract humour that anyone can enjoy, The Baby is not. (Sorry to go on about The Baby in an unrelated thread, but....damn.)

I would have prefered the guy's head to come up behind the sofa even slower, if possible. Also the script during his 'emergence' isn't that great; not very well written and not amazing delivered. Its the kind of scene you want to watch more than once and when you do, you start focussing on other things besides the head, which is when things like the script/acting stand out.

When you're using abstract humour in every day situations, the realism of both areas plays a key factor in how well the juxtaposition works as a whole - so the acting is the major let-down really, since it wasn't believable enough to contrast suitably strongly with the guy's head appearing.

Pretty nice camerawork though.
Posted: Tue, 13th Jun 2006, 5:17pm

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The camera work was pretty good, though the lighting in the living room was down a bit to the point of making it hard to pick everything out compared to the kitchen scene. (Of course that may have been intentional.)

I'll confess, I really didn't get the humor portion of it discussed above, but that's probably just my own sense of humor (or lack thereof) showing.
Posted: Tue, 13th Jun 2006, 10:22pm

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Thanks Xcession.

I did the canerawork and editing, but left the direction of the acting, well.......just up to the actors. It was almost all improv, with each take being slightly different. The man, who is actually the actor Reese's father, was actually eating the sandwich that the boy had just made in real life, so he could only come up so slowly without us laughing our heads off over the irony. Plus, after 3 takes there's only so much PB & J left to make it even slower. wink

Jazzmanian wrote:

The camera work was pretty good, though the lighting in the living room was down a bit to the point of making it hard to pick everything out compared to the kitchen scene. (Of course that may have been intentional.) I'll confess, I really didn't get the humor portion of it discussed above, but that's probably just my own sense of humor (or lack thereof) showing.
The second actor, Micheal, has long hair to which he (at first) refused to move out of his face. And, once I had the scene lit for Reese, and had done his shots, I didn't want to risk consistency of the scene by changing them for the actor Micheal.

Of course, the kitchen and bathroom are both lit abit more, as they were done with a completely new PB & J in-hand. (The first one got away from us somehow.)

Is the joke not apparent to you, or does it just not appeal to you? It's supposed to be funny because he is freaked out after making a PB & J, he feels that ever since it is gone someones been watching him, then a person eating the PB & J is watching him, literally. It's the irony of the situation.
Posted: Wed, 14th Jun 2006, 10:09am

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Is the joke not apparent to you, or does it just not appeal to you?
Not apparent. If it didnt' appeal to me, I wouldn't have bothered commenting, since everyone's sense of humor is different. I understand the irony behind the situation. (It ties into an old line, "just because you're not paranoid, that doesn't mean they aren't out to get you.") And I got the fact that he *felt* like somebody was watching him, and in fact somebody *was* watching him. I just didn't get the humor from that. To each their own, though. Like I said, my sense of humor tends to run towards the dark so it's probably just me.
Posted: Wed, 14th Jun 2006, 1:15pm

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Alot better than The Baby! Camera work was nice throughout and to top it off you had a richard dreyfuss lookalike eating the pb&j sandwich, Genius. 3/5

And yes I did crack a grin when he rises behind the sofa. smile
Posted: Wed, 14th Jun 2006, 11:30pm

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The main kid did a very nice job of acting.

When he flips the lid on the jelly and smushes the sandwich down, those two shots should have been cut way sooner. The sound when he puts the stuff on the counter is fantastic.

It does however violate the one unwritten rule of comedy, if in fact that's what it is, it ain't funny.
Posted: Thu, 15th Jun 2006, 4:42pm

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This wasn't good.
The filming and editing was good enough to make me give this movie a 1, but the rest of the film, I did not like at all.
It was boring, lame, and pretty meaningless.

And I thought you guys had started making good movies now...
Posted: Thu, 15th Jun 2006, 10:03pm

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Well, I can't speak for anyone else, but I thought that was well funny - nice work lads! biggrin
Posted: Fri, 16th Jun 2006, 4:21am

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Klut wrote:

This wasn't good.
The filming and editing was good enough to make me give this movie a 1, but the rest of the film, I did not like at all.
It was boring, lame, and pretty meaningless.

And I thought you guys had started making good movies now...
Again, the editing and camerawork on here has no holes, yet we're seeing alot of 1's. Why? Surely the solid, good editing and camerawork account for more than 20% of a movie's rating, especially considering we're on an international, amateur filmmaking website where comedy may not hit everyone the right way.

I wasn't any part of this project, so I'm not really speaking with a bias here, but I understood the rating system on here to be more about merit and less whether we generally "liked" what the movie had in it. This may sound foolish, but I can give you a prime example. Rudy Picardo's episode Alpha is that. I'm not the hugest fan of the story or the lightsabers in it, but I can surely appreciate the great camerawork and editing in it.

I personally thought Monkey Madness was absolutely terrible. IMO, the technical quality was far below average and the comedy was unappealing. However, I understand that you spent time and a good deal of effort on it, and to me that shows merit. I didn't like it, but I didn't want to rate you poorly just because it wasn't my cup of tea. Hence, you'll notice I didn't vote on it, rather I gave you a good "congratulations on winning, Klut".

I'm not saying that we shouldn't vote on movies we don't like, but when people take the time to make a movie, and frame the angles well, and edit it with proficiency and good comedic timing, I honestly don't think voting the second worst rating is fair, especially with how you phrased your justification.

I didn't set out to knock your movie when I started this post, and I'm sorry for that, but to say "...and I thought you guys started making good movies" is ridiculously rude and pigheaded.

I dunno why you can't get past this quite-obvious "Atom-hate", it's been like this ever since he commented on your stupid X-Men test, but I think you should soon, it's getting really old.
Posted: Fri, 16th Jun 2006, 9:34am

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I'm sorta new-ish around here, and I have no clue why everyone bashes on Atom and (to a lesser extent) you as well... unsure I haven't seen much that would warrant this behaviour, anyways!

So yeah, I still this movie was funny, i don't see why nobody else is finding it entertaining! biggrin
Posted: Fri, 16th Jun 2006, 12:55pm

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Thanks for finding it funny, aplha, we sure do!
Posted: Fri, 16th Jun 2006, 5:50pm

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Ben wrote:

The editing and camerawork on here has no holes, yet we're seeing alot of 1's.
Don't be so pretentious. I'd hate to be the millionth person to say this, but not everyone thinks the same. Obviously, from the ratings, people beg to differ.

Ben wrote:

..When people take the time to make a movie, and frame the angles well, and edit it with proficiency and good comedic timing, I honestly don't think voting the second worst rating is fair...

Atom wrote:

[This is] A quick little movie made in about 10 or so minutes
Well, Ben, I think it seems Atom didn't take all the time in the world to make the great film you think this is. He took the time to make it, but doing it in 10 minutes isn't going to produce the best film here. The directing, framing, and editing is nothing special becuase... well, there's not much to work with.
If you're trying to outdue yourselves and show everyone that you can make a movie in less than a day, it's not working. Take your time and craft the piece to something better- I know you're doing it with Splinter Cell, and I'm sure that's going to come out very well when it's ready.

Ben wrote:

I'm not saying that we shouldn't vote on movies we don't like...
When you guys breathe down our necks waiting for a good response and we give you something you don't want, you complain. That makes us not want to vote on your films. Don't give me that crap.
Posted: Mon, 19th Jun 2006, 5:16am

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This movie was stupid as hell. But I laughed and it was different so I gave it a 4.

For a split second, the guy eating the PBJ reminded me of Howard Dean.
Posted: Mon, 19th Jun 2006, 5:42am

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ther2kglitch wrote:

This movie was stupid as hell.
Thanks, that's kind of the point. I don't think many people understand that.
Posted: Mon, 19th Jun 2006, 9:35am

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When you put it that way ben, I think I should change my vote to at least a 2/5.

But I'm unable to change my vote, so I'll just say it in person.
because of the camerawork and editing, I give you a 2.
I could have given you a 3, but the scene where the old guy appears behind the teenager and eats his food, the camera zoomed in. That was horrible. Felt a bit like arrested development, but that ain't good if you don't make the whole film that way.

so 2/5 it is.
Posted: Tue, 20th Jun 2006, 12:02am

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I didn't film this, but I'm pretty sure it was zoomed so that it was quicker and easier to rack focus on the kid, then the guy, then the sandwich.

It was supposed to be like Arrested Development, The Office, Curb Your Enthusiasm, Sons and Daughters, or any other ad-libbed comedy show that plays off of zooms and racking focus.

If you'll note, the camera zooms out twice slightly when the two speakers are introduced. The same comedic timing of the zooms is used during the chorus of Eye of the Tiger. It's pretty much supposed to be funny because it's stupid. When you're making something that's supposed to be pretty stupid, I don't see why you'd want to spend more than 10 minutes on it, if you get what I'm saying.
Posted: Wed, 21st Jun 2006, 11:46am

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Yes, it's stupid. But it's not stupid/funny enough razz
Posted: Wed, 21st Jun 2006, 12:34pm

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Point taken.
Posted: Sat, 24th Jun 2006, 7:54am

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holy crap fxhomers...seriously this is just a dumb film andrew and i made for the hell of it. This isn't our full potential, and we know that. Fxhome i thought was just a place for us to just show what we're doing, even the stupid things. come on, not everything you make HAS to be perfect. We honestly made this in 10 minutes. It was a total spazz deal, and i didn't know that atom and ben would put this on fx (i didn't know about it....again...haha yet i don't care much bout credit on this one, it was just a stupid project we did half heartedly cuz my "theater friend" wanted to make a movie. We made it to apease him lol. so...i've rambled enough, loosen up everyone, not all of our stuff at atomic is meant to be critiqued.

edit: i hate zooms as well...and i was the camera guy so shoot me for not going by the book. like i said...half hearted. also we shot with two cameras so the zooms i figured would be cut out in the editing...but the editor decided not to use both angles.
Posted: Sat, 24th Jun 2006, 8:24am

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not all of our stuff at atomic is meant to be critiqued
Then not all of it is worthy of posting, surely?
Posted: Sun, 25th Jun 2006, 12:31am

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Good call arktic, as all films that are posted will be critiqued no doubt.
Posted: Thu, 13th Jul 2006, 9:28pm

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i found the movie funny. The camera angles and all are good. Yes it realy is lacking. Man the part where the man comes out cracked me up. It's stupidly funny. You get a 2.