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Posted: Thu, 16th May 2002, 3:40pm

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Idgas

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If any one is interested i have written a short script about 7 pages long that is about an assasin that has a special ability. It's pretty good but i don't have the resorces to shoot it. If you would like to make a film out of it then e-mail me and you can have it. I would like to see it made into a short film. I can add to the plot or you can take whatever you want or change it or whatever. It's not copy righted but i would like to see how it turns out. Here is a little view at it.

As soon as the guard sees him he draws his weapon. Dagger, in a blur like motion, moves in fast until he is an arms reach from the guard. The guard, not sure what he just saw, stands there staring.

GUARD 2
Who are you???
DAGGER
NO ONE.

Dagger reaches out and crushes the guard’s esophagus before he has a chance to make a sound.

So just send me an email or reply here.
Posted: Thu, 16th May 2002, 6:12pm

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That looks quite good. Id like to have a go if you dont mind. It'll take a while to be done, due to other things (like college and coursework crazy !!)
But ill try my best. Email me the script at:

mighty_joe2001@hotmail.com

thanks.

mighty_joe
Posted: Thu, 16th May 2002, 6:26pm

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i don't wanna make it, but i wanna read the script send it to tmmi8u@Hotmail.com thanx smile
Posted: Thu, 16th May 2002, 6:37pm

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Idgas

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Have you done any movies yet mighty joe? Some of the scenes in my script will be pretty complicated.
Posted: Thu, 16th May 2002, 6:57pm

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Ive done some shorts, and a few testers. Im in the middle of writing a first proper film, dunno whether its gonna be feature length or a short yet!
Maybe this will be complicated, and out my reach, but theres no harm in trying biggrin ! So if you send me the script, ill know whether or not im capable. And as ive said, ill do my best

mighty_joe
Posted: Thu, 16th May 2002, 7:53pm

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i'm realy buisy with other movies right now... but the script sounds pretty good biggrin
Posted: Thu, 16th May 2002, 9:35pm

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Idgas

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thanks V6 that means alot. Its kinda the first script i'v written and it was harder then i thought.
Posted: Fri, 17th May 2002, 9:28am

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Posted: Fri, 17th May 2002, 5:36pm

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I think it would be a great idea for various 'studios' to make their
own version of a movie from the same script. We could even judge the results, I would love to get involved myself but i'm still sweating over my own project, 'Certificate X'.
But best wishes to all those that do take on this project....
Posted: Fri, 17th May 2002, 5:53pm

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Idgas

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so far i've given it to about 4 different people that want to make it. I think it would be cool to see how it gets interpreted differently. I know i have my own ideas how I would shoot it but im excited to see what comes out. lol lol
Posted: Fri, 17th May 2002, 7:02pm

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I would like the script as well; lord.dugall@jaune.net Thanks. smile
Posted: Fri, 17th May 2002, 11:47pm

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Hey malone or schwar is it ok if i post the script here it is 6 pages long in MS Word. I'm getting more requests than i thought i would
Posted: Mon, 20th May 2002, 10:37pm

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Well here it is


EXT – STREET – EVENING (The Target)

Two men dressed in black suits leave the entrance of a department store looking up and down the road in a suspicious manner. A third man, Robert Dean, comes out. The three men move directly to the car.

INT – VAN – EVENING

Through camera lens we see Dean and his men moving to the car, camera zooms in and takes two shots (pictures of Dean) as he is entering the car.

EXT – STREET – EVENING

Dean gets into the car; one of the men slides in next to him, the other goes around to drive.

INT – VAN – EVENING

A man sits next too a window lowering his surveillance camera. He hears the electronic click, and picks up a two-way radio

Taylor (V.O.)
Can you confirm the target?

MAN
Yes Sir, positive I.D.

Cut to next scene

INT – KITCHEN – EARLY MORNING

An elderly man mid 50’s, Tony Fisher, sits at a table reading a newspaper and drinking coffee. Well dressed in suit and tie. The phone rings. Tony picks up the receiver and waits for a series of beeps and tones to establish a secure connection.

TAYLOR (V.O.)
The target has been identified.

TONY
Very well Mr. X, contact Dagger.

TAYLOR (V.O.)
Sir, with all due respect, I think my team…


TONY
Contact Dagger Mr. X, I want him briefed and
Ready to go with in 18 hours.

TAYLOR (V.O.)
Sir, I don’t like using this guy he’s a wildcard.

TONY
I understand your concern Mr. X but we have no
Choice. If Dean goes under again we may never get another
Chance. I need a guaranteed removal, Dagger is that guarantee.
Contact Dagger.

Tony ends the connection.


INT – ROOM – DAY


Dagger sits behind a laptop connected to a satellite dish pointing out the window. From his screen you can see a black and white surveillance video and pictures of Robert Dean. Dagger is on the phone.

DAGGER
So who is this guy?

TAYLOR (V.O.)
Robert Dean, a self-appointed drug lord.

DAGGER
Where is he.

TAYLOR (V.O.)
I’m sending that information now.

Daggers screen shows a profile of Robert Dean and his file. The address to his house.

DAGGER
How many men with him?


TAYLOR (V.O.)
Were not sure.


DAGGER
When?
TAYLOR (V.O.)
Tonight. He leaves tomorrow.

DAGGER
No problem.

TAYLOR (V.O.)
Dagger I don’t want the same….
Line goes dead.

Dagger puts down the receiver and returns to his laptop. Typing keys as the screen changes pictures.

EXT – STREET – NIGHT

Dagger pulls up across the street from Dean’s house. Its dark and only one streetlight.

EXT – HOUSE – NIGHT

Through the window you can see Dean go to his room. He walks to the window and secures the lock. Then back to the door, the lights go out. The men stand silently, one outside walking through the yard, the other inside the house by Dean’s room.


EXT – STREET – NIGHT (The HIT)

Dagger opens the door to his car and gets out.

Cut to exterior guard.

Guard 1 is standing next to the house talking on his cell.

GUARD 1
No Sandra I can’t go tonight. I’m working…

The guard sees Dagger approaching the house. Dagger is walking straight toward the house.


GUARD 1
Hey pal, this is private property you need to leave.

Dagger continues to walk toward the door, ignoring the guard. The guard begins to approach Dagger intersecting him from the door. The guard places his hand out as Dagger walks into it.

GUARD 1
I don’t know whom you’re here to see but your not
Invited.

Dagger looks down at the guards’ hand.

DAGGER
I’m not here for you. Now remove your hand.


Guard pulls back his jacket to reveille a holstered pistol.

GUARD 1
Look pal, whoever you are, either walk away or
Be carried away. Makes no difference to me.

Dagger looks down at the holstered gun, closes his eyes and exhales. With no warning Dagger reacts with inhuman reflexes. First grabbing the guards hand spinning it around and breaking his neck before he could blink.

Dagger moves the body out of the way and hears the radio.

GUARD 2 (V.O.)
Hey Tony how’s it going out there?

GUARD 2 (V.O.)
Hey Tony, are you on the phone again…

Dagger continues toward the house.


INT – HOUSE – NIGHT

There is a guard by the front door talking on the radio.

GUARD 2
Hey Tony pick up the…

Just then the front door begins to open slowly.

GUARD 2
Tony, man you just took a leak. You have to stay…

Dagger comes around the door and sees the guard. Everyone pauses for a brief second. The guard quickly pulls his pistol from his belt and aims. Before he is able to shoot, Dagger quickly goes up under the guards extended arm and snaps it at the elbow. (The guard drops the gun.) Then an elbow to the guards nose, crack, the guard is dead. Dagger quickly catches the gun before it lands on the ground.

Dagger silently moves through the house. Down the hall he can see the guard by the room. With no other way to get there with out being spotted Dagger simply starts to walk.

As soon as the guard sees him he draws his weapon. Dagger, in a blur like motion, moves in fast until he is an arms reach from the guard. The guard, not sure what he just saw, stands there staring.

GUARD 2
Who are you???

DAGGER
NO ONE.

Dagger reaches out and crushes the guard’s esophagus before he has a chance to make a sound.

INT – BEDROOM – NIGHT

The door is kicked open and Dagger strides in. Two shots are fired at him instantly. Dagger moving faster then reality is able to dodge both bullets.

Dean’s eyes widen.
DEAN
How??….

Dean backs away from his closing assassin.

DEAN
Who sent you? Do you have any idea
Who you’re messing with? WHO ARE
YOU???????

Dagger moves in and closes the door behind him. Then removes his mask. Deans eyes grow wide. His breath gets short. Fear is on his face.



DEAN
It’s you. Hey… now what a minute. I did everything
you told me too.

DAGGER
I told you too leave.

Dagger moves around too Dean. Slapping him to the ground. Dagger paces around Dean like a rabid wolf.



FADE OUT

Let me know what you think please.
Posted: Tue, 21st May 2002, 8:11am

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domdino

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right its got some good bits...

but you might wanna cut down on the cheese a bit, sort out some of the punctuation, and carry it on a bit more...

good start tho
Posted: Tue, 21st May 2002, 2:56pm

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Idgas

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thx
Posted: Tue, 21st May 2002, 3:00pm

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domdino

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n don't ya think you should call him maybe something other than Dagger?
lol
Posted: Tue, 21st May 2002, 3:02pm

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Idgas

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Yea i know it's kinda cheezy biggrin i had named him Cole but it didn't sound right. You got an idea ??!!!??
Posted: Tue, 21st May 2002, 3:05pm

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err why dont you call him fluffy, just for the irony of it.
smile
i dunno what about spoon! oink)
Posted: Tue, 21st May 2002, 3:07pm

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Idgas

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um fluffy? no thats too classy spoon? not scary enough. tard
Posted: Tue, 21st May 2002, 3:10pm

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domdino

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hows aboot, wallawalla patang niiip.
Posted: Tue, 21st May 2002, 3:20pm

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domdino

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ya see you wanna do summin a bit more subtle. I think dagger is just ott. Its like a poor excuse for blade...

crazy

i dunno though really...
hard to suggest a non-cheesy name for an action character.

All i know is that dagger sounds silly! razz
Posted: Tue, 21st May 2002, 3:43pm

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Take a tip from Nikita and call him The Cleaner...
Posted: Tue, 21st May 2002, 3:45pm

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domdino

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good call.
good film.
Posted: Tue, 21st May 2002, 3:54pm

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domdino

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although i prefered leon
Posted: Tue, 21st May 2002, 4:38pm

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Idgas

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Yea The Cleaner is cool, how about Mr. X
Posted: Fri, 31st May 2002, 12:23pm

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That script is the shit, dude. . . I've got a few scripts in the works.. if you and I worked together, our movies would own, man . . .
Posted: Fri, 31st May 2002, 3:13pm

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Idgas

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poo ??
Posted: Fri, 31st May 2002, 8:12pm

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Well see, the word filter put poo. I really typed S#!T.. or SH*T, whatever you want to call it . . . and it came out poo.. but yea its the bomb-diggity, dog . . .
Posted: Fri, 31st May 2002, 8:18pm

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Idgas

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Thanks smile I hope to finish it one day but am real busy at work.
Posted: Wed, 12th Jun 2002, 6:10pm

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I'd like a copy, too.

My email is mier33@yahoo.com

Thanks!
Posted: Wed, 12th Jun 2002, 7:10pm

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Idgas

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it on the previous page of this forum
Posted: Sun, 16th Jun 2002, 5:00pm

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How about Junior? quite a simple name, quite innocent, but capable of quite evil things! lol. The character of our new film is called Juniour, it was the only name I could think of that sounded different in all major British accents. Thats how I name my characters! If you want a sorta futuristic type name how about Switch, or has that been done in the Matrix? I cant remember. If thats been done, sorry! lol. Naming a character is quite hard to do isnt it? tard