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Day of the Hobo

Posted: Tue, 8th May 2007, 1:39pm

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A comedy in which two gangsters attempt to rob a magic hobo of his money.

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Posted: Wed, 9th May 2007, 7:29pm

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Tripod? take time with effects? acting?

That sums it down smile

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Posted: Wed, 9th May 2007, 7:41pm

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B3N wrote:

Tripod? take time with effects? acting?
I understand what you mean by the tripod and the acting but what was wrong with the effects?
Posted: Wed, 9th May 2007, 7:43pm

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take a good look at the first bit where they run in shooting like crazed monkeys with a spanner up there ass. the effects aren't well done, look closely at them the sort of...whats the word...lag? or look like an image pasted on
Posted: Wed, 9th May 2007, 7:58pm

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1. PLEASE slow down when your talking. Talk slow and understandable.
2. Please shut your cameraman up because I heard him laughing during a shot.
3. Never do any First Person scenes again, EVER!
4. The same as above, but with slow motion.

I liked the car explosion though.
Posted: Wed, 9th May 2007, 8:12pm

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I think it's fair to say that this isn't a masterpiece. But let's not be abrasive. FXhome has been a home to me over the years because of it's friendly and honest treatment to newcomers and filming advice. Let's keep it that way.

Darth Penguin, I'd have to guess that this film is more of a bit of fun than a serious attempt at creating and filming a believable or enjoyable film, and there's nothing wrong with that at all. However, I'm going to assume that you want to improve, here are just a few suggestions.

the 180 rule : Several times a shot where someone was travelling in one direction was cut to a shot with them travelling in the other. This is disorientating for the audience smile A good example of this is when the Hobo approaches the car with the harpoon.

Drawn out shots : Several times there was just one hand held shot for the duration of several sentences, if you're going for a comedy then try and vary the shots you use. Splitting between mid-shots, close-ups and reaction shots are key along with good timing.

The script makes no sense : Speaks for itself. Both the characters could have shot the Hobo as they still had guns and there was a bit where someone sat in the car despite the Hobo laying on the roof. Seemed odd. smile

The few effects you used were ok, though would benefit from a bit of smoke stock footage. The Car explosion being an effects high-point.

All in All, I think you get the message. It's obvious that this film was neither planned or (I hope) to be taken seriously. It'd be good to see something you've spent some time writing and designing at some point, do you have any future plans for a film project?

-Hybrid.
Posted: Wed, 9th May 2007, 8:42pm

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Hybrid-Halo wrote:

It'd be good to see something you've spent some time writing and designing at some point, do you have any future plans for a film project?
I can answer that. smile Darth Penguin, Clawgaboozagis and I are neering completion of a serious project called Cobra 12. it should hit the FXhome Cinema some time in June.
Posted: Wed, 9th May 2007, 8:43pm

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Jabooza Clog Booza wrote:

Hybrid-Halo wrote:

It'd be good to see something you've spent some time writing and designing at some point, do you have any future plans for a film project?
I can answer that. smile Darth Penguin, Clawgaboozagis and I are neering completion of a serious project called Cobra 12. it should hit the FXhome Cinema some time in June.
Groovy, I'll look forwards to it. smile
Posted: Wed, 9th May 2007, 9:53pm

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Yeah, it wasn't meant to be a masterpiece. We just decided to do a movie one day, and did one with no script and hardly any plan at all. The effects appear to lag during the "crazy monkey" shooting sequence because I effected it in 30 fps and it was compressed to 24 fps, getting rid of some of the muzzle flashes. We filmed a sequel (night of the hobo) that we put a lot more work into, and although it has the same crazy concept of an invincible hobo taking on two gun-wielding gangsers, it's a lot better. It should be up any day now.
Posted: Thu, 10th May 2007, 1:32am

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This was actually very entertaining. The film making aspects of it were not the best but the effects were pretty good and it had me laughing almost the whole way through. Good Job you guys!
Posted: Thu, 10th May 2007, 6:22am

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Yeah can't wait for your second movie and good luck planning it, fliming it [tripod by any chance?] and acting better in it.

Good luck

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Posted: Thu, 10th May 2007, 10:30am

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I hope to be pleasantly surprised by the next one smile
Posted: Thu, 10th May 2007, 3:04pm

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I'm in the next one. smile We already filmed it, it's in post-production right now. We did not use a tripod due to the fact that Darth Penguin's broke last winter when we were stupidly filming out in the cold, and I don't have a tripod...or a camera. Anyways, the cinematography is much, much better even without a tripod, and the acting is ALLOT better too...so are the effects...and everything else. I think everyone should like it allot.
Posted: Fri, 11th May 2007, 1:38am

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THIS FILM ROCKS!!! I remember when i started doing films at that age. they were similar in carzines but nowhere near as good quality. young crazy filmakers, i salute you!
Posted: Fri, 11th May 2007, 4:01am

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Ondwey wrote:

THIS FILM ROCKS!!! I remember when i started doing films at that age.
Oh, I get it. You make a statement about being older than them so it doesn't seem like you're just their friend who's trying to make them look good. Right on! biggrin

As for the movie, it's currently downloading. Rating in a few minutes....
Posted: Fri, 11th May 2007, 4:58am

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It was.. Ok. The audio was pretty bad. You really need a tripod. I found it funny at times though. The yogurt thing got a smile from me and a laugh from my brother. This was not a "Bad" movie but there is some room for improvement.
Posted: Fri, 11th May 2007, 10:46am

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It was funny at some points. I liked the effect with the explosion inside the car. The yougurt bit was funny, me and my bro laughed.
So i rate this film 4/5
Posted: Fri, 11th May 2007, 12:08pm

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You guys know what? This movie's actually not too bad. A bit ridiculous in places what with all the laughing by the cameraman, but other than things like that, I like it.

In fact, I want to remake this. Can I?
Posted: Fri, 11th May 2007, 2:47pm

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If that is a serious offer, you should feel honoured!

I watched this movie but it was lagging (not the files fault or server. 'tis the computer's fault) but I liked it. I have to agree, the laughing cameraman has some work to do but overall it was enjoyable.

The only way to get better is to practise, so keep it up

3/5
Posted: Fri, 11th May 2007, 8:55pm

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Yeah I agree, the only major flaw was the cameraman laughing. I remember when I made movies when I was young and the camera man laughed too, some scenes its just so funny you cant help it.
Posted: Fri, 11th May 2007, 11:14pm

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Two weekends from now, after this year's video race is done, I'm remaking this movie.

For sure, for sure.

My bro's on board also. It'll sort of make fun of the flaws in this movie, but mainly it'll stick true to the original script.

And to be honest, this movie's jokes were sort of lame (except for, "The gloves are off....sort of", LMFAO) but I found them hilarious because of how funny it seemed to have been from all the cameraman's laughing.
Posted: Sat, 12th May 2007, 12:16am

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great movie!
it had me hooked,
and thats whats i like about movies like this!
original!
5 stars!
Posted: Sat, 12th May 2007, 12:22am

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Digerati Media wrote:

If that is a serious offer, you should feel honoured!

ben3308 wrote:

It'll sort of make fun of the flaws in this movie
I'm honored.
Posted: Sat, 12th May 2007, 3:14am

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ben3308 wrote:

Two weekends from now, after this year's video race is done, I'm remaking this movie.
That would be awesome. Not that Darth Penguins is bad, but that it would be cool to see it done by ben3308.

By the way, what is "after this year's video race"???
Posted: Sat, 12th May 2007, 3:40am

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This year's "video race" is coming up on May 18th-19th. The weekend after that I'll be free. The video race is the 24hr competition I made Cover's Story for last year.

BTW, I've already got some script ideas for this remake. Should be pretty sweet.
Posted: Sat, 12th May 2007, 3:45am

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Thrawn wrote:

Not that Darth Penguins is bad
Well, it isn't excactly a masterpiece biggrin
Posted: Fri, 18th May 2007, 12:40am

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It was great, i laughed, only problem was the sound recording, which wasnt that great, liked the car explosion too smile

"i think ill go have some yoghurt" was my favourite line.
Posted: Tue, 22nd May 2007, 11:52pm

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ben3308 wrote:

Two weekends from now, after this year's video race is done, I'm remaking this movie.

For sure, for sure.

My bro's on board also. It'll sort of make fun of the flaws in this movie, but mainly it'll stick true to the original script.

And to be honest, this movie's jokes were sort of lame (except for, "The gloves are off....sort of", LMFAO) but I found them hilarious because of how funny it seemed to have been from all the cameraman's laughing.
When do you think you'll start filming it? Will it be around the same length as the original? Any details would be great. The one thing that I'm really interested in is who is going to be playing the hobo.

It'll be interesting to see this and Night of the Hobo released around the same time.
Posted: Wed, 23rd May 2007, 4:17am

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Jabooza Clog Booza wrote:

When do you think you'll start filming it? Will it be around the same length as the original? Any details would be great.
Hoping to start it this weekend, though I could be wrapped up in something else. The video race just happened, so any day off I have now is good to film.

Jabooza Clog Booza wrote:

The one thing that I'm really interested in is who is going to be playing the hobo.
My friend Chase who's in all my stuff. This guy.

Posted: Sun, 3rd Jun 2007, 7:17pm

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Night of the Hobo (the sequel to this) has been submitted to the cinema and is waiting to be reviewed by FXhome, but you can watch it now by clicking here. Or you can watch it on YouTube by clicking here.
Posted: Mon, 4th Jun 2007, 4:15am

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Jabooza Clog Booza wrote:

Night of the Hobo (the sequel to this) has been submitted to the cinema and is waiting to be reviewed by FXhome, but you can watch it now by clicking here. Or you can watch it on YouTube by clicking here.
I gotta say, I was dissappointed by this immensely.

Not because it wasn't good, it was, but because it started off so strong in the technicals and storytelling (5 material) and then went downhill. If anything, it's often smarter to reverse this, having the strongest part of the movie at the climax or conclusion so that the audience is left wowed.

If you "wow" people at the beginning and then don't deliver (at least not with as much style) for the rest of the film, they're not going to think that much of the movie as a whole.

That's why, in Cover's Story, it starts with a bang and ends with an even greater one: the realization that the beginning of the movie is actually the end, and vice versa. And in Redemption, it starts slow and rapidly gathers speed into a huge conclusion. Except for you gave both of those a 2- though I've no idea why- so maybe you wouldn't agree with me of this one; but as far as storytelling goes they're better ways to construct your movie. Think more in terms of how the audience will view it and how well it holds their attention, is what I'm saying.

Ultimately, what I'm trying to say is this: Night of the Hobo shows me GREAT improvement if your ability to produce a movie, but as far as keeping me entertained and interested for the whole movie and up until the end, Day of the Hobo was far superior.
Posted: Fri, 15th Jun 2007, 2:48am

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Go here.
Posted: Fri, 15th Jun 2007, 5:43pm

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Hm, just saw this and I have a few comments...

Acting
The hobo's acting was alright for an amateur, but the two other's acting were sort of dragged out, and silly. If you were aiming for something funny, it didn't work well. If you were aiming for something serious(which I doubt you were), try to make the characters have more in depth conversations that go somewhere. Not something like, "Whatata? What we do? do what? what that athat??"

Camera work
I'm not going to say it was bad because I could see what you trying to do in most of the shots. A tripod would help, and a steadycam for the first person view. The camera work would of been improved immensely. Try to have a stoic camera man next time. His laughing was sort of distracting.

Effects
They were alright. The muzzle flashes were a bit off. The car exploding effect was pretty well done.

Overall: 2/5 It's good for a your first movie. Keep it up.