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Jonas

Posted: Thu, 26th Jul 2007, 12:29pm

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When "Jonas" makes a wrong turn on his way to "I.S.S", he quickly finds that his small mistake has irreversible consequences. ---

Thanks to; Cole timms, Brandon Henry, Molly Cole, Louis Pujol, Lexi Peterson, Jordan Hankins, and Jp Gregorview.

Film was shot, written, directed, and edited by: Brian Hunt.

Lights off! Sound up! Enjoy!


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Posted: Thu, 26th Jul 2007, 1:09pm

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This had a very interesting nightmareish "feel" to it. When it pulled that off, it was really rather spectacular!

The cinematography in this is a mixed bag for me. It's very "Tony Scott" and I admit that I really dislike his visual style. While it fits for certain aspect or moments of a story - for example the middle part when the nightmarish blackboard thing appears - it doesn't work for me when applied to everything and for too long simply because I get tired of it rather quickly - the beginning for example is far from being a nightmare, and yet it had basically the same visual style.

Also, I just really dislike handheld, shakey, out of focus just to move into focus and out of it again camerawork when the narrative doesn't absolutely call for it. It's not my thing. A lot of people like it though, especially younger ones more inspired by the MTV style of editing and framing. Guess I'm already "too old". biggrin

The sounddesign was really clean and nicely put together, though occasionally missing some foley work (footsteps, clothing, objects, ambience etc). Apart from that, it was highly effective and fit the narration perfectly.

The use of actual on set lighting effects however was absolutely brilliant! I loved that. And there was also some shots in there that were so perfectly well framed, composited and light that I found it a real shame the style of the framing was as it was over everything. (That first screenshot for example in the movie description is totally awesome in terms of everything visual!)


All in all very well done! I'd love to see something longer from you that doesn't use the Tony Scott thing during it's whole running time, but rather only in those moments where it actually fits.
Posted: Thu, 26th Jul 2007, 6:54pm

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I liked the feel of this. I didn't quite understand it, and the ending didn't really fit.

The lighting and cinematography was great. I loved how horrific everything was.

Great job, I'd love to see more of your work!
Posted: Thu, 26th Jul 2007, 7:25pm

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I concur with Kyal, "I didn't quite understand it, and the ending didn't really fit."

I think what you did visually though, you did very well, it was just a little too much of it for my taste. I feel in this area, less is more. Don't do it just because you can, do it because it adds something that you couldn't otherwise acheive.

Personally it's just not my style, I prefer more story and dialogue, over effects, lighting, music, etc...

That's just me though and I'd likely say the same about most of what is coming out of Hollywood too.
Posted: Thu, 26th Jul 2007, 7:44pm

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I haven't watched it yet, but I'll make sure I do by the days end.
Posted: Thu, 26th Jul 2007, 9:02pm

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Brian, you already know I love this, except for the crossing the line with the two shots of the bus at the end. I don't like that part, but other than that it's all there. Cole does a great job, too.
Posted: Fri, 27th Jul 2007, 2:50am

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GREAT use of lighting, and it was like Tony Scott-style. I'm not the hugest fan of it either, but you did a great job with it.

The "Wheels On The Bus" chant totally reminded me of the Freddy Kruger "chant "One, Two, Freddy's coming for you..."

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Posted: Fri, 27th Jul 2007, 2:54am

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kinda reminded me of "1408". I thought the camera work was great. The chant was my favorite part.

5/5
Posted: Fri, 27th Jul 2007, 4:53am

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Hey guys!
I would first off like to say thank you for watching the film, and taking the time to write critiques about it. It means a lot that you guys would take the time to do that.

I know that "Tony-Scott" style film making will hit or miss with people every time. I've found that cinematography can be so much about personal taste, that I can understand when it doesn’t fly with some people, and then hits the nail on the head with others. It’s just a personal taste thing.

Before filming the project, I decided to choose basic words that the script brought to mind, and I used those words to base the visual look I wanted for the film; "claustrophobic, clench, light, grain". And let those words kind a be my guide line for what i wanted to achieve visually. If you watch the many of the scenes, there’s a lot of light, and I liked the idea of making a horror film in an almost overly lit setting. I tend to be more a fan of suspense then horror. So I tried to stay away from blood and focused more on the physiological side of fear, by showing silhouettes and partial facial shot of our “ghostly girl”, instead of spoon feeding the audience with gore.

As far as not understanding the ending and saying it doesn’t fit. That's fine, but I'll ask first, if you noticed the multiple chalkboards and the loud chant, that were saying the "The Wheels on the BUS". The ending, is a result of the premonition that was on the written on the walls, chalkboard, and in the chant. So just in case you didn’t catch those things, I'd ask that ya give it a second glance. smile

The next project that i will be uploading in about a week or so, is a brother and sister drama film. So expect to see a completely different product. For those of ya guys who aren’t Tony Scott fans...This next one may be more your "cup of tea". smile

Thanks for watching guys!
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Brian
Posted: Fri, 27th Jul 2007, 4:55pm

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NEOGLITZ'S FILM REVIEW DISCLAIMER
The following is in my opinion, and my opinion only, regardless of what the maker thinks I am supposed to think, read into, catch visually, or otherwise, this is my opinion only as to the film in my subjective point of view...

I'm torn....
Visually this piece is great in spots and ok in others. The opening (as already stated by Sollthar) is a GREAT shot! Some of the others in the nightmare portion (if you will) are just too over done for me. Hand held camera issue did not bother me. The lighting was great in the film. Rating of 5.

However, I just missed the story on this completely somewhere. You explained the "Wheels on the bus..." thing in a response above with the ending, but I am still feeling a bit... I don't know, maybe, cheated on the ending? Regardless, the story is my problem with it. Rating of 3.
Posted: Fri, 27th Jul 2007, 10:59pm

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Thank you for your comment.

Just "FYI", im not one of those film makers who needs a disclamer to accept constructive critisim. lol. I value every one's objective opinion, and as long as there are no comments made just for the sake of being rude... Then I'm totally fine with hearing what people have to say. This is after all, a forum.

Any who, thanks neoglitz.
Have a good day man
Posted: Sat, 28th Jul 2007, 12:02am

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That's a cool movie. The shots were good, I was just kinda lost in the story, but that's no big deal. One thing, I looked for at least one reason why this was rated 15+ and I couldn't find one, looks more like a pg movie to me. great movie
Posted: Sat, 28th Jul 2007, 1:32am

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Now that you explained the 'wheels on the bus' concept, I find the ending somewhat clever. I think you should of made that point stick out more. So at the end the audience actually says, "Oh! The wheels on the bus!"

Anyway, this was really cool. I'd love to see more of your work.
Posted: Sat, 28th Jul 2007, 2:26am

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Hey Kyal,

Thanks for giving it a second glance! That means a lot!

It seems different with each audience i show this film too. Some catch the "wheels on the bus" concept right away, and some don’t. I've found as a majority that most people catch it. I tried my best to not be too "tongue in cheek" about the ending, cause it bugs me when movies paint it too big, just to make sure Everyone is on the same page.

I've always seemed to have liked movies the reward you for watching a second time, cause if you go back on this film, you'll notice the chant is backwards, the writing is backwards, until the scene with the bathroom stall.

I did have a more obvious edit of that, but the abrupt shock of the bus, seemed in the end to feel best.

Any way Thank you for giving it another look! And I have another film that I’m going to post in about 2 weeks, I think it should be pretty decent

And Rody Polis!
Thanks for the comment.
The reason I rated it "15+" was simply cause of the bus scene at the end, and the cinematic style of horror this was shot in. I just went with those elements and figured it was the correct rating.
Posted: Sat, 28th Jul 2007, 4:19am

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SNI BRI,

I enjoyed most of this! I got the wheels on the bus deal immediately when the bus hit him, however the crossing the line was a little jarring.

The opening shot made me think this movie was going to be incredible until...it followed that girl as she put her flip flop back on. I'm not sure why that happened, but that ruined the shot a little for me. The shot where the teacher says "JONAS" also crossed the line and threw me off a little. It could have been, I suppose, some sort of artistic choice, but I doubt it.

The only other thing that bugged me a little was that I think reversed symbol sound that was overused a ton. Other than that, everything else I really liked. I got a little bored of Jonas freaking out reading the blackboard and everything, it went on for awhile. And, the grading for the most part I enjoyed, but it seemed too inconsistent.

In any case this definitely pulled off a scary feel, and I completely agree about not using gore and everything. The mental factor, for me, is much more frightening.

Great job! I can't wait to see your next film!

-Logan
Posted: Sat, 28th Jul 2007, 4:20am

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SNI BRI,

I enjoyed most of this! I got the wheels on the bus deal immediately when the bus hit him, however the crossing the line was a little jarring.

The opening shot made me think this movie was going to be incredible until...it followed that girl as she put her flip flop back on. I'm not sure why that happened, but that ruined the shot a little for me. The shot where the teacher says "JONAS" also crossed the line and threw me off a little. It could have been, I suppose, some sort of artistic choice, but I doubt it.

The only other thing that bugged me a little was that I think reversed symbol sound that was overused a ton. Other than that, everything else I really liked. I got a little bored of Jonas freaking out reading the blackboard and everything, it went on for awhile. And, the grading for the most part I enjoyed, but it seemed too inconsistent.

In any case this definitely pulled off a scary feel, and I completely agree about not using gore and everything. The mental factor, for me, is much more frightening.

Great job! I can't wait to see your next film!

-Logan
Posted: Sat, 28th Jul 2007, 5:49am

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I thought you did a very good job with this film. The grading was great and the acting was surprisingly good. The camera work and lighting were great. There were some sounds that were a little overplayed.

Just like Hatsoff2halforad, I got the Wheels on the bus thing right away. But I felt the ending was not the best. All the build up for him to be hit by a bus just didnt seem right to me. I gave you a 4/5 and if I could have given you a 4.5/5 I would have. The reason it wasnt a full 5 was mainly the ending. Other than that it was a great film. Good Job.
Posted: Sat, 28th Jul 2007, 6:35am

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You already know my thoughts, I'm sure.

I love how this movie is whippin' 'Marathon', despite their distinct similarities in grading, cinematography, editing, sound-design, acting, actors, and plot-depth. Competition against yourself, eh? smile

I love it and it creeps the crap outta me at the same time. 5/5.
Posted: Sat, 28th Jul 2007, 7:03am

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Hm, I didn't even get that the bus was supposed to hit him. crazy
The bus drives obviously NEXT to the guy, not into the guy. And there's no soundeffect as to him being hit at all.

I was thinking about if it was supposed to hit him, but for me it was too obvious that the bus drives past him so decided on just a scary effect.
Posted: Sat, 28th Jul 2007, 7:16am

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I know, he should've just hit him or done CG. Those are, really, the only options these days. wink
Posted: Sat, 28th Jul 2007, 8:26am

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Atom wrote:

I know, he should've just hit him or done CG. Those are, really, the only options these days. wink
I know you're kidding, but for the sake of contributing I'd like to post this method. Basically tripod + red truck + actor falling on edge of the frame and rotoscoping around truck =

http://www.cpostudios.com/moviegroupfiles/joeycar.mov

I think it looks convincing concept-wise. We were trying to make it kind of stupid looking but I'm sure you could make it look cinematic for something serious.

On to the film, I'm saying stuff as it goes along and it's 4:00AM so I'm a bit tired:

Titles looked terrible. I love the masking effect, but the text rendered poorly in whatever you used. It wasn't smooth. Maybe it was the font or the compression, but it was too harsh, blocky, and un-antialiased (can I say that?). A lot of the text broke the TV safe zone as well, I'd watch out for that. Also, when he got to ISS, I saw some tape noise. Intentional? And just because it was ISS and with my experience in ISS, I couldn't help but smile at first. For some reason I think detention would have been better word for me, but that's really because of my school, nothing to do with the film. Though maybe detention would have worked in general, not sure. When the kid left the room, the hallway from above shot, with the blue plumbing, looked way out of place. I don't know if this was intentional, but it just didn't work for me and kind of interrupted the film. Another flaw is that I felt this moved way too slow to retain my interest.

And on to the good stuff:

Visually fantastic. I thought the concept was cool. The camera and crazy editing work were really awesome. The sound went really well with this as well. The good is less than bad because I can't really point out specifics. In my head the goods weigh out the bads and that's why I will give this film a 4/5. Everything bad I listed was just stuff you could fix. The only thing that brought it down to a 4/5 was the pace.

I love this kind of style, especially for creepier films. This is something I'd like to read a "guide" on because it can obviously be used well.

Atom wrote:

distinct similarities in grading, cinematography, editing, sound-design, acting, actors, and plot-depth.
I agree maybe with cinematography, though less long shots here. The grading work in this film is completely different. The editing in this film is completely different. The acting is completely different as this is a completely surreal situation. The sound design kind of, but this is more Asian horror plus creepy piano. I got more epic cinematic feel from Marathon rather than the former. Not saying one is better than other, but I really don't think it's similar. Actors? Similar in age? Maybe you know the kids better than I, but I don't see how this is similar. You could say that about any 2 films then really. As for plot depth, I think this is too subjective to comment on and especially for such different kinds of films. I'm not trying to argue with you, but I just don't think anything is similar whatsoever. I liked both films, however different I believe they were.
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Serpent wrote:

Actors? Similar in age?
More like same person, lol. biggrin

"Jonas" is "runner who chases Black" and vice versa.

Also, I just realized that the fluorescent lights manually turn off, rather than something done in Vegas, like I'd first thought when I saw this on MySpace. Brian, did you use separately-wired switches or something?

Also, are you coming to the Marathon screening today? It's at 3pm behind Sports Authority off of Central Expressway.
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Well, I must say "Great little piece here!" I loved the suspense and myself am a fan of suspense over gore/blood. It was very Japanese horror inspired, like "Ringu" or "The Eye" just to name a few. The Tony Scott thing didn't bother me too much, and for me that type of film and editing style added to the suspense; you don't know what is going to happen next, and that approach doesn't give your brain much time to analyze or imagine what is going to happen next. It kept me on the edge of the seat just waiting to have something pop out at me:)

But that is where I feel a bit disappointed. Not just this film but in a lot of commercial and big budget films these days. The only way to scare people anymore is to have that “startle effect.” Suspense is a hard thing to achieve and I think the sound design really helped out here. The ending seemed rushed. What I mean is the actual filming of it. The Wheels on the Bus thing I got and it was very self explanatory, but I personally what have chosen another way of filming the ending. But that’s me. All in all, this was a great piece. Keep up the good work and I’m waiting patiently for more work from ya!

Peace,
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Hey guys!
Thank you for commenting on the film guys! I really do appreciate the feedback from the “Fxhomers”. It’s really great to opinions from filmmakers and not just the average Joe viewer.

First off....

COLE. (aka. "JONAS") smile. I GOTTA GIVE PROPS TO MR. COLE TIMMS! I meet Cole in January and asked him kind of at random to be an actor in a film project called "Jonas", he jumped at the idea pretty instantly. Cole has quite a bit of theater training, and this was his first attempt at film. He is very naturally a gifted actor in my opinion and comes across very comfortable on camera.

He will be starring in a film we're doing called "Clench", which will be due in about 2 months. I won’t be saying much about the project, as I don’t want to build hype just yet. But it looks promising at the moment.

Cole and I have become pretty good friends, and he wanted to participate in the 48 film race with some other close friends of mine "Ben and Andrew". So Cole and I ended up doing some of the acting in "Marathon". That’s what "BEN3308" means when he says “the same actor”.

Just to clarify-“ Jonas”- is its own project and was not affiliated with the "Atomic Production" crew at any point during production of "Jonas". Jonas is a "Legacy Films Production".

Serpent thank you for your Post!

As for the ending shot, I have yet to really become savvy with special effects. That’s one of the goals over the next year. And with as powerful of an effect that I wanted visually for the ending of the film, I decided to not try something “CG”. Because I knew my ability on “CG” would have screwed the film. Regardless if the bus shot works PERFECTLY... the shot was choice I made, and I know I’ll only learn how to do that trick better in the future. Experience is the best teacher, ya know. smile

That's funny that you point out that "blue plumbing shot". LOL. I cringe every single time i see that shot. It's my fault for leaving that in there. In editing i realized i had no establishing medium shot of the door. And that footage is all I ended up having...lol. But ya gotta go with what you got in the end. smile

Thank you so much guys, keep it coming

Keep Filming!
Brian
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SNI BRI wrote:

That's funny that you point out that "blue plumbing shot". LOL. I cringe every single time i see that shot. It's my fault for leaving that in there. In editing i realized i had no establishing medium shot of the door. And that footage is all I ended up having...lol. But ya gotta go with what you got in the end. smile
Heh, you could always just cut it out. wink I don't know what kind of limitations you guys had though.

@Ben: Lol, didn't even realize it. He acted so very little in Marathon and starred in this one. Didn't even recognize him so I hardly considered it a variable as to where these stand in the cinema. Other than that the actors just seemed like other people such as a girl, the girl in the hall, the other kid, and the teacher. Maybe there were some of the same, but the leads were different at least. smile
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The only actor that was in this and marathon was cole.
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Yeah, sorry for the confusion. I probably shouldn't have worded things the way I did.

Also, like Brian said, this is in no way related to Atomic Productions- only in sexy-ness-level. wink
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The most important part of a film is the story. You can have the best grading, acting, effects, editing, and cinematography; but if your story is bad then non of that really matters.
Posted: Sat, 28th Jul 2007, 8:22pm

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Very stylish, I liked the cinematography which is damn good, especially using what you have available, and putting thought into it. Little things, like playing with the overhead lights and the blue gym equipment contributed really well. I also like the concept and 95% of the execution.

The other 5% involves a couple criticisms. The sound effects were great but the dialogue recording wasn't so good (apart from girl).

Much though I like the visuals, it's overgraded at the beginning, before he gets to ISS. I think you should have gone for a normal, natural high school look with warm colours, then gone to the visual style you have later. I would have had a wheel/round motif throughout the movie to add to the style, personally. E.g. tape player turning, water trickling down plughole, eye extra-close-ups.

I agree the end shot is a bit weak but there's not that much you can do. I would have ditched that shot and had Jonas' head turn and cut right to a front shot of the bus speeding towards the camera, screeching and fade to black, but that would have been dangerous and more difficult to get if the bus driver wasn't in on the movie.

Good work!
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Dancamfx wrote:

The most important part of a film is the story. You can have the best grading, acting, effects, editing, and cinematography; but if your story is bad then non of that really matters.
Not true. Something can very easily be entertaining without a clear story. Evidence is "The Test". Downplaying those elements is just as criminal as not having a story to begin with.
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Atom wrote:

Dancamfx wrote:

The most important part of a film is the story. You can have the best grading, acting, effects, editing, and cinematography; but if your story is bad then non of that really matters.
Not true. Something can very easily be entertaining without a clear story. Evidence is "The Test". Downplaying those elements is just as criminal as not having a story to begin with.
Anything can be entertaining. A video of a guy on youtube singing the numa numa song can be entertaining but the whole point of film making is telling a story.
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basically...i love the cinematography and style, lighting, all that...oh and the sound design was very well done.

infact, i liked everything except the ending...

i'd paused the movie in on one of the shots of the chalkboard, to read what it said, just cause i'm like that, so i get the ending...it just felt way too sudden. I didn't really even have time to be surprised really, it was just like, "Oh, i guess thats it..."

Oh, and by the way, it was nice having a very clear, uncompressed-ish version to watch for once...lol

Clinto
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This was really nicely done. I liked most of what I saw in your movie and the sound was almost perfect. Not much more to be said other than keep up the good work.
Posted: Tue, 31st Jul 2007, 6:19am

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WOW!
Two thumbs way up, 10 out of 10, five stars and it was good too.

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Posted: Tue, 31st Jul 2007, 7:03pm

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I watched it yesterday, wow.

Besides not understanding the whole thing it was spectacular.

4/5.
Posted: Tue, 31st Jul 2007, 11:05pm

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mAN, deffiently a great scary movie to turn the lights off too.

Camera work was amazing, You did a great job with the canon XL2 in lowlight, thats the biggest problem ive had with the camera is it's very poor in low-light.

Story was as it should have been, i was a bit confused if it was supposed to be a spoof or not, but right away it got downright scary and i was sucked into the scary atmosphere, deffiently a jumpy movie. Loved it man

4/5 from me.
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omgg woww this movie's really really good 10/10 def! well done mate. wink love the camera angles and the lighting.
Posted: Sun, 5th Aug 2007, 10:16am

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Gees, I saw this one and it was a little creepy, but really good the story was supurb, the imagry was fantastic, I gave it a 5.

Well done guys'
Posted: Sun, 5th Aug 2007, 1:21pm

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Sarkilas

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Really well done! This was an amazing piece of work.

I loved how you did the lighting and camera work, as mentioned before.
Since I am an amateur myself, there was not much I could criticize, so a 5/5 from me.

Simply amazing!
Posted: Mon, 6th Aug 2007, 1:28am

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BringPopcorn

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It looked pretty good.
Posted: Tue, 7th Aug 2007, 4:24pm

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Shimi

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Wow, great skit. The film effect was great, close to a film look. I completly Enjoyed it. It cut's to the chase and leaves you wondering from Beginning to End.
Posted: Wed, 8th Aug 2007, 10:06pm

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Brett Plank

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That was awesome! very scary, i was really freaked out throughout the whole movie, holy shiznit at the end with the bus that scared me because i turned my volume way up to hear then WAM!! and the horn sound effect, awesome movie, 5 stars! by the way, what kind of camera was that?
Posted: Wed, 8th Aug 2007, 11:30pm

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ben3308

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It was filmed on a Canon XL2.

Great, extremely capable camera; but it's got this fuse issue that burns out the camera completely, which is why the creator of this movie has been without his for months.

When he gets it back though, I'm sure he's got some awesome movies in store.
Posted: Sat, 11th Aug 2007, 9:05am

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SNI BRI

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HEy to ALL!

I'm sorry about my rather timely delay on my response to your comments, but first of let me say...THANK YOU!

The feedback is really wonderful to receive, and i really am humbled by many of the film makers on this website. So again thank you guys for giving my film such a good look over.

The camera that this was filmed on was the " CANON XL2". It is my left and right arm. It is my soul mate, Lol.

At the moment I'm going though warranty hell with CANON and it is beating me down... I now to date, have gone almost 4 1/2 months with out a functional camera. Needless to say its beating me down. I have had to put some very important film projects to me on hold, until further notice.

If any one has any questions on the filming of this project or anything of that nature, feel free to contact me. Via, Private message or through "AIM". I'm always intersted in talking to fellow film makers.

Any who. Thanks much guys!
Have a good one
Brian
Posted: Mon, 13th Aug 2007, 6:07pm

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I thought this was well put together. Even though the concept & idea, didn't seem to reach its full potential. It started off like an in-school-suspenison version of The Grudge or The Ring. Then kind of faded to nothing. Good for you it ended before it faded to bad.

All Around Good Job
Posted: Mon, 13th Aug 2007, 6:41pm

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FilthyRichy

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I think its great. I agree with the general consensus though - the bus at the end didn't work for me. I've seen it used so many times...

But hey! - some of the best films end up having the endings changed!
Posted: Tue, 14th Aug 2007, 9:11am

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fisher

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You know the game "FEAR"?
I've played it, and... The horror-scenes you have in your movie are quite similar to the ones in the game... And in the game, i was frightened all the time wink.
A very good movie, i absolutely liked it... fantastic smile
I'm thinking of doing something like that, too... Like the shot where tha camera is in a dark room and there are two doors, one in the front and one downstairs, the rest is blackness, and then there walks a person in front of the door... i LOVE that shot, compliment!
4/5 stars from me, almost 5 wink
the only thing is the Bus in the end, it looks just a littlebit... unrealistc.
greez luzifer
Posted: Wed, 15th Aug 2007, 1:41am

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FXhomer24220

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how do i save it your vid
Posted: Wed, 15th Aug 2007, 7:12am

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Atom

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Right click on the play button and go to "Save Target As.." and select a download destination. It's wmv, so it brings up a separate streaming player just by clicking instead of opening it up in the internet window- if that's what is confusing you.
Posted: Fri, 17th Aug 2007, 10:19pm

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wolfdawg

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Personally, I really enjoyed the "Tony Scott" feel of the film--I know how hard it is to pull off, and actually look good, so Kudos to you and your team. Overall, a very nice job. I also liked the psychological use of lighting, and angles. 5 Stars from me!
Posted: Thu, 23rd Aug 2007, 10:50pm

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The Duelist

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This movie was overall quite well done. I think the 'not knowing what's going on' part actually fits, because the whole movie is like a headache, a conversion of present and future where the character doesn't know what's going on. However, I really think the ending scene was botched. This would have been an amazing movie had the ending left the audience with more of a feeling.
If I were to do this scene, I'd have him walk to the road, and suddenly grasp his head. There'd be a flashback of Jonas saying "what is this place," then some scattered scenes from the part where he tries to talk to the others. Then I'd begin flashing slowly at first, through the myriad "wheels on the bus" scenes, speeding up faster and faster until it's a roaring cacophony of voices, almost an otherworldly noise. There's a quick cut to the front of the bus and everything goes silent with the bus almost blotting out everything as it gets very close. Then a distorted, muffled and echoing scream as everything fades to black.
Anyway, that's my opinion. Great job on this film, you had me really freaked out. Best wishes and congratulations,
-The Duelist.
Posted: Fri, 24th Aug 2007, 4:18pm

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Penguin

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The cinematography was great, but it didn't really make any sense. He seemed to be in a perfectly normal school, and then when he got to ISS there was a girl who had been there forever and all kinds of wierd scribbles on the chalkboard. Then he wandered around for a while. In the end when the bus appeared, it happned way too fast, and I would have put a thunk when he gets hit.

Overall, 3 stars. I would have given it five if the plot had made since.

Also, was it intentional that the girl looked like the girl from the ring, and there was a shot from under him while he pounded on the door that looked like the one from the shining?
Posted: Mon, 3rd Sep 2007, 12:49pm

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The Chosen One

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I enjoyed this film, It had a mix of alot of other horror movies, The Ring, Saw, Nightmare On Elm Street, The Shining, just to name a few. The ending was a little fast, but worked for me. Good Job, Keep it up.