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Nick's last day at the office

Posted: Mon, 26th Nov 2007, 3:10pm

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Whilst getting ready for his last day at work, Nick contemplates where his life will take him next

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Posted: Wed, 28th Nov 2007, 12:40am

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This began very basic and I thought to myself "oh, not another uneasy-camera with black and white and a voiceover". Then as it progressed, I leaned my voting from 1 or 2 to an immediate 3 and possibly a 4, as the cinematography quickly became top-notch and the story interesting and poignant for a voiceover about, well, a day.

Then came the ending. An absolutely chilling piece. I sat back in my chair. Perfectly timed and drawn-out and, again, absolutely chilling. Loving the accent, too.


A word of advice, though. Don't rate your movie a 5, at least immediately, until others have rated and/or seen you movie. As, and it's sad but nature, people tend to gravitate to lower ratings to 'balance' your high rating of yourself. When really, this is a quality piece by itself and now might not be seen that way right off the bat. I know I myself check for the approval and ratings of some higher-regarded members on movies before I give them a close gander. Normally when I see a movie at the top and it has got the vote of its creator, I'm sad to say I usually pass it completely. Same with YouTube. Some people may see convenience to it, but to me it just looks sloppy. Poor quality and little thought put into it, even though logistically it would seem more-accessible. To me, a banner and download is more appealing immediately, but that's just me.

Other than that, great stuff!
Posted: Wed, 28th Nov 2007, 6:10pm

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It had me from the beginning, Nick's dread of his last day at his job, then it threw me for a loop at the end. Nice camera work too. Great job smoorns!
Posted: Wed, 28th Nov 2007, 7:10pm

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That ending was so bad ass. 5/5

I could see this short being the beginning of a feature film. That or could even condense it to make it a trailer for a feature film.
Posted: Wed, 28th Nov 2007, 7:57pm

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Pretty good twist. The only thing that really dampened the experience for me was the voiceover, honestly. I'm not a big fan of voiceover in general, and I just can't get as excited about a story told through voice over as I could a story that's just told visually. I think this could have worked much better if you had taken some more time to show us what's happening instead of tell it through the voiceover. And re-do that alarm clock shot! wink

Posted: Thu, 29th Nov 2007, 10:47pm

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F'aaahhhuck - Loved it. The voiceover was perfect for the film IMO. The images throughout very well done and put together. Great job. Great Job.
Posted: Fri, 30th Nov 2007, 4:23am

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Wow. You built it up so perfectly for that twist. Great job! I think the montage, grading, and voiceover work nearly perfectly together. I disagree with Aculag a bit: Generally it is better to show not tell, but in this case the voiceover, which both sets a dreary but ordinary mood and gives a picture of Nick's state of mind, works to make the end all the more horrifying.
Posted: Fri, 30th Nov 2007, 6:05am

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Things that were particularly good:

The consistently rigid shots, usually obscuring whatever is in frame.

The seemingly unscripted, casual tone to the voice over, all the way through the end.

The non-specificity of the entire video. Sort of like a random slice of life we get to watch for a couple minutes.

Not so good:

The mic sounded very cheap and boomy.
Posted: Fri, 30th Nov 2007, 8:59am

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You hit it dead on with that twist.

Posted: Mon, 3rd Dec 2007, 6:03pm

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Wow the last shot is so great to the twist when Nick brings his gun down!
The casual tone of the main character and his motive combined gives a powerful impact to the film.

I agree with CX3. It could be a beginning of a feature film!
Posted: Wed, 5th Dec 2007, 5:41am

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Very Very disturbing......I Like IT biggrin What a twist! It gave me chills. Nice work!

What ever you do dont make it a feature film. It has more of an impact the way it is.
Posted: Fri, 7th Dec 2007, 4:51pm

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2 words holy s***! wow. That was great. The non-moving camera, black and white picture and the overvoice made the whole thing add up. In 3 minutes you managed to produce a thriller and a horror film at the same time! 5/5 from me. keep this sort of stuff up!
Posted: Sun, 9th Dec 2007, 5:19pm

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Great.. Loved the twist cool
Posted: Mon, 10th Dec 2007, 10:16pm

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This is my type of movie. You think it's going one way and then bam!something unexpected. I would like to see a sequel to this movie.
Posted: Fri, 14th Dec 2007, 9:08pm

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can you have a sequal to this movie? It preety much tells the plot and its great on its own...though what i would like to see is some more films with twists as good as these
Posted: Sat, 15th Dec 2007, 4:59pm

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Excellent! The story and Cinematography were beautiful, but the audio was horrible. Use a pop filter!
Posted: Mon, 17th Dec 2007, 4:45pm

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Stephen this is an outstanding short film,one of the best I've seen .This
is an original piece beautifully filmed with an incredible voice over which played such an important part of the package.
You have a great talent ,keep up the great work.


Posted: Tue, 18th Dec 2007, 3:38pm

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hey, thanks for all the great feedback you guys have given. I know the audio is a letdown as I didn't use a great mic but that will be rectified in the new short which I am scripting at the minute. Thanks again for taking the time to comment on my little movie
Posted: Sat, 10th May 2008, 8:57pm

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Some stylish shots & the voice-over was perfect for lulling me into false sense of security. You did very well with the twist at the end. My only criticism would be a technical one about the sound - cheap mic, no pop filter = not great results. This is a shame because the voice over was really VERY good.

You don't have to spend a lot of money for a decent mic & it will make a major difference. When it comes to film the ear is less forgiving than the eye.