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Posted: Fri, 9th Jan 2009, 3:20pm

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This is a visual metaphor of the most famous Psalm, 23. I used muzzle flashes and optics from EffectsLab Pro. I have had great fun with this program, and it has inspired me to create. This is actually my first non-comedy. I was able to use an EX1 1080p camera with a home made jib and dolly. I had a ton of fun on this project. I love guns, sound editing, guns, and running. Shooting, guns, and running in slo-mo is always cool. Let me know what you think.

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Posted: Sat, 10th Jan 2009, 7:37am

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This, truly, is a really incredibly produced short film.

While it can be true that a good camera like the EX3 can make almost anything look better than it is, you clearly used it to near its potential. The shots are creative, varying, and cleverly-edited.

The grading is consistent and, despite the shooting/guns/debris being shown; fits perfectly (in a thematic sense) into how I'd envision a similar metaphor for Psalms.

The editing, acting, and music is all pretty good; but I think the production design here eclipses everything else and really sells the short as a whole. The numerous tactical men in the video made them seem more like a real, commanding force rather than just a few teens in parceled gear. The debris thrown at the protagonist when he ran down the hall, too, made the illusion of a rampant firefight all-the-more realistic.

One qualm, however, is the earlier-on muzzle flashes, which didn't look random enough on a flash-by-flash basis. As in, it appears that the same image repeats off-and-on several times over the video, rather than it looking like a gun is actually firing. This 'issue', of sorts, is resolved later on in the video (at least, it appears that way) so this really isn't the hugest deal.

Overall this is an extremely solid piece of work, and I'm proud to give it 5/5 stars; which is something I haven't done a lot recently. For what you were going for and the (apparent) attitude with which you executed this, I think you did a phenomenal job.
Posted: Sat, 10th Jan 2009, 4:13pm

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Hey, This was awesome guy, YOU DID IT WELL !!! Congrulations !!! Just weapon's song was "so so" ... well done
Posted: Sat, 10th Jan 2009, 5:26pm

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Wow man. eek
Posted: Sat, 10th Jan 2009, 6:21pm

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Hm... There's a lot in here to like. Some well framed shots, some very good attention to light, some good editing and a couple of very, very nice details (pieces of wall for example. Made it feel like a proper shootout)

However, all in all, it doesn't come to a 5 for me and here's why:

While there's awesomeness in some shots, it's not consistent. There's a few shots in there which show less attention to light and framing then others. So the technical quality is a shifting for between ok and great for me.

And then, the main point why this is no 5 star film for me. It tells me nothing.
There's a man running and wonderously not hit by one single bullet despite the fact that 5 machine guns are firing at him in an open space. Even blind 5 year olds would have a really hard time NOT to hit him in that scenario. So I found the premise and content of the film to be pretty meh...

And good technicals alone don't make a good film for me. But it definately shows great potential. Hopefully you'll make another one with the same attention to detail, but with an actual story and real humans behind it.
Posted: Sat, 10th Jan 2009, 7:33pm

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I agree with Solthar about the guns and the shooting but it came to me as a really good short film with a great musical score and it deserves a 4/5
Posted: Sat, 10th Jan 2009, 8:31pm

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4/5 stars. The reason why it's not 5 stars is because of some of the muzzle flashes. Other then that, it was great as far as lighting, angles, and sound design go and what a great passage to turn into a film.
Posted: Sat, 10th Jan 2009, 8:37pm

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I think what sets this apart from most other submissions in the cinema is its attention to lighting. Far too often I have seen otherwise impressive camera angles/effects/editing/acting/whatever absolutely ruined by completely inappropriate lighting. So excellent use here.

But I can't give this a 5 for a very specific reason, one that follows close on the heels of what Sollthar has said; there's no substance to this short. Here's why that's such a big deal to me. There is so much obvious effort put into the visual production values on this it makes me ignore it. But why, you ask? The reason is simple. When I'm watching a film made with a budget the size of GDP for some countries, I automatically assume all the technicals are in place and I watch the story and characters. For homemade films, the ability to pull off a particular effect or look is the primary focus of the production. So, with your work here the production quality for a "homemade" film was so high I, without thinking, slipped past the "I'm watching someones technical attempt" and settled into a state of mind usually reserved for after I've paid my $10 for a ticket.

And that's why I can't give this 5. You have achieved a level of technical prowess that is out of the league of home movies and into the realm semi-pro or professional, and with that comes the extra bite in reviewing.

I hope you take from this my profound praise for your abilities. It is meant as a compliment what I've said. Marry together your ability shown here and some real characters and genuine story, and I'll be a major fan.
Posted: Wed, 14th Jan 2009, 1:12pm

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I Actually Enjoyed This, Thee Was Something Bout The Story Line Which Just Drawed Me In. Really Good Camera Work Aswell smile

Keep Up The Great Work!
Posted: Fri, 16th Jan 2009, 2:50pm

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Whoa, really nice! My only problem was with the sound design. Sure, I loved all the booms and muted gunshots, but why not some echoing footfalls as he runs down the hall or some bangs when people fall? It seems like the only sounds in this movie are booms, whooshes, and gunshots - which all contribute to the feel you're going for, but - at least for me - take away from the moment's realism. Still, I'm glad to see that you did pay atention to sound.

Your visuals were spectacular, by the way. I'd love to see this on a big screen. The upside-down shots before and after the cuts to the meadow were amazing!
Posted: Sun, 18th Jan 2009, 1:24am

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I appreciate all your comments. Thanks. First of all, I know the story is a tad thin, but I really wasn't looking for a crazy deep story. It's simply a guy experiencing peace in chaos as he runs for freedom. I didn't think we really needed to know much beyond that. And, as I said, my first non-comedy, I was really trying to create something visually pleasing. It's a metaphor. I realize he would be shot in real life, but again, this is metaphor.

Also, as to the sound comments. I did three edits of this film. The first was very music driven. Heavy rhythms. But in the end, I decided to really go "less is more." I actually had footsteps picked out to use, but I went with the breathing, voices, and echo gunfire. I thought it worked pretty well for the mood I was looking for.

Keep the comments coming.
Posted: Sun, 25th Jan 2009, 12:13pm

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Awsome, noice slow mo and camera angles
Posted: Sun, 1st Feb 2009, 2:21am

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This films camera movements and positioning, along with slow motion shoots were excellent. The FX's only enhanced all of it. This film making maybe FXHome now, but he (or she) is destine for FX Hollywood in the very near future. Two thumbs-up!
Posted: Tue, 3rd Feb 2009, 10:17pm

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Simply Awesome.
Only thing that I would have suggested is that the when they are shooting at the guy it didn't feel like they were shooting at him. Um... In other words I think there should have been elements that suggested the bullets were close to him - even a bullet trail in slow mo passing by his temple as he takes the guy out would have given it more weight that he as in danger of dying.
Posted: Fri, 6th Feb 2009, 12:46am

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Damn dude! Pure awesomeness! I loved it from the lighting to the shots to the overly impressive editing! I I really enjoyed the story as well! You got to teach me some things for my serious action film I'm working on haha. Keep me posted with your future works and best of luck to your future in film! biggrin