The intro is almost a minute long! Please shorten it.
Alrighty I'm going to tell you a problem I saw and how to fix it...Problem:
Some of the audio is poor, echos, or is hard to hear. This is mostly only for the beggining part though.Solution:
I would suggest buying a boom microphone or buying a seperate microphone such as a handymic. A good boom mic can be found here.
It is called the Rode Videomic and is what a lot of people here (I assume) use. A good seperate mic can be found here
. It is called a DR-07.Problem:
At 1:18 it skips a part.Solution:
Just a simple editing problem.Problem:
At 1:50 it freezes.Solution:
I'm not sure if you meant to do this but it seemed unrealistic.Problem:
The running scenes were much too shakey and you could here the cameraman's footsteps.Solution:
Not much you can do about the footsteps however, for the shakeyness I suggest using a handmade steadcam. Here a some instructions on how to build it:http://steadycam.org/Problem:
The part at 4:00 was hard to understand what exactly was happening. Also the audio at 2:30 was hard to hear.Solution:
Explain the plot through the movie a little better. And for the audio either turn the music down or once again get a seperate mic.
Other than these few minor problems I think it turned out rather well. I give it a solid 3/5
PS: Nice use of painted Nerf Guns. I didn't notice it until I rewatched it.