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Vengeance

Posted: Mon, 21st Jul 2003, 10:37am

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CurtinParloe

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I thought I'd (finally) submit something after all these years wink . There aren't many effects in this, but it's my first try with alamdv2.

The whole thing took 2 hours, not including redubbing all of the dialogue (wondered why my lips don't match the words? smile )

(Constructive) comments please...

Paul


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Posted: Mon, 21st Jul 2003, 11:06am

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b4uask30male

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well, just had to put divx on the wife's pc to see your film.

(Constructive) comments please...

ok

Move the tv to the other wall, change the wall colors to a lighter cream. ( sorry me trying to be funny )

Not bad, music went well in places, ( but speach was too low )
Angles were good ( for being on your own )
alam fx looked fine smile
I liked the costume, I would try for a gangster film next, you looked good in the part, some moody music, some dusk shots, could be a winner.

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Posted: Mon, 21st Jul 2003, 11:12am

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Merola

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I'm sorry.... but I found it kinda booring smile
And you should color correct it a little, the colors was very flat.
Posted: Tue, 22nd Jul 2003, 7:25am

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MATT PUGH

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I'm downloading the film now. And just now that whether any comments are constructive or not. Accept them with open arms and don't be a scardy cat.


PEACE OUT

I'll review this thing in a few
Posted: Tue, 22nd Jul 2003, 7:52am

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MATT PUGH

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a little too often the music drowned out the words. But it wouldn't of mattered becuase I think that the more your characters spoke the less sense the movie made. I believe it was back in the 30's or sometime when movies were made with no sound except an old lady playing piano music while the film was projected on a screen. Perhaps you should try that approach before putting voices into your next few projects. Becuase as long as you keep your mouth shut you could do great in your films. Where as having your jaws flapping is just an open invitation to failure.



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Posted: Tue, 22nd Jul 2003, 8:21am

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CurtinParloe

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b4,
costume? they're my normal clothes wink
as for the sound, I don't seem to have any good audio codecs. I'm working on it.
btw, we changed the wall colour, it's much better now...

Merola,
i know what you mean about the colour correction, although I feel they aren't flat enough! This is the problem with using ordinary room lighting, my decent lighting is in my dad's shed smile.
Boring... in what way? Do you mean "not enough action" or "the characters were unengaging" or "it was killed by the editing" etc etc etc...

Matt,
I messed up the sound on the recording, so I ended up having to redub the whole thing. It was all off the cuff, so I had to lipread for the script! I don't think the audio codec does it any favours either.

That constructive comments comment was aimed at that guy who posts "Oh yeah your film was f**g s**" without giving a reason. If someone tells me why it was f**g s** and which bits were particularly b**s that's fine smile

Paul
Posted: Tue, 22nd Jul 2003, 8:32am

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Merola

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smile The movie is ok, but... nothing I'd watch twice wink
... but I liked the music, It worked good with the movie.

And the punchline is kinda klische (dunno how that is written)

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Posted: Tue, 22nd Jul 2003, 5:15pm

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Lee Charlish

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It wasn't terribly bad, but it wasn't terribly good either... The music worked well, but I was a bit confused by Jimmy Cagney's appearance. Why was he dressed like that? Hackneyed story premise didn't help, but it never really went anywhere. The acting was actually better when the actor (you?) was dressed like 'Jimmy Cagney', perhaps that suit and hat gives him special powers. It was seriously flawed by the mumbling dub as well... Why dub? Do it again and think about sound more... It wouldn't really have been much of a chore to re-shoot surely? A guy on the sofa, presumably in his own living room and separate shots of Jimmy doing his stuff... Shouldn't be totally slated perhaps, but it's a little lazy to try and pass something you know is sub-standard (with the sound problems you already knew were there) for public consumption.

I bet you could do better... I give your film a 2 and Matt Pugh's terrible English and soporific discourse a 0.
Posted: Tue, 22nd Jul 2003, 7:01pm

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MATT PUGH

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I'm flattered that a scholar of Harvard is giving my English a grade. Sorry that I don't try to make my words perfect for you lee. But as far as I'm concerned you can shove it up your A**.



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Posted: Tue, 22nd Jul 2003, 7:04pm

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Lee Charlish

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MATT PUGH wrote:

And just now that whether any comments are constructive or not. Accept them with open arms and don't be a scardy cat.
Come on Matt, don't be a 'scardy cat'.

Peace out.
Posted: Wed, 23rd Jul 2003, 3:42am

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MATT PUGH

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If you dont mind me asking lee. But what do I have to be scared of?
I hope you're not referring to yourself. Because you are as intimidating to me as a garden snail.


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Posted: Wed, 23rd Jul 2003, 5:10pm

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I can only say if matt pugh tells you to shove it, you'd better listen. I'm still suffering from nightmares after watching the seminal work in ghost terror, 'Writer's Block'! For those who enjoyed that, I recommend the enitre line of films from Fred Olen Ray! Come on folks. Relax.
Posted: Wed, 23rd Jul 2003, 6:47pm

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Lee Charlish

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Yawn.
Posted: Wed, 23rd Jul 2003, 10:09pm

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god emperor wrote:

I'm still suffering from nightmares after watching the seminal work in ghost terror, 'Writer's Block'!
Arf! You suck.

Mr Parole, I'll be checking your movie as soon as possible.
Posted: Thu, 24th Jul 2003, 3:36am

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MATT PUGH

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Fight, wut are you talking about. Why did you say God emporer sucked.
that's not very nice


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Posted: Tue, 29th Jul 2003, 1:53pm

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CurtinParloe

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Merola,
I think you mean cliche smile

Lee,
For such a short time making it, I decided it wasn't worth reshooting. I might as well just do something new instead. As I said originally, it was going to be a media test, cine vs video, so i didn't do much work on the script (like writing it)
Lazy? I suppose so, I can't be bothered arguing the point wink But the amount of high scoring stuff I've seen on here without even an attempt at a story, or sometimes even sound, I figured as a first upload attempt it was worth it. And I will do better, watch this space...

Matt,
If you're so keen on accepting criticism with open arms, why couldn't you take Lee's criticism without getting abusive? And another thing, did you really think every one of your own films was worth 5 stars?

Paul
Posted: Tue, 29th Jul 2003, 3:27pm

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Lee Charlish

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CurtinParloe wrote:

But the amount of high scoring stuff I've seen on here without even an attempt at a story, or sometimes even sound, I figured as a first upload attempt it was worth it. And I will do better, watch this space...
But why (if you aspire to be better) settle for submitting sub-standard work simply because of the poor quality of other films here? It's your call I guess... Anyway, good luck with your next one.

CurtinParloe wrote:


Matt,
If you're so keen on accepting criticism with open arms, why couldn't you take Lee's criticism without getting abusive? And another thing, did you really think every one of your own films was worth 5 stars?
This is my point... Unfortunately, he seems incapable of puzzling this out for himself.

The arbitrary nature of this board doesn't allow for contentious debate either it seems.
Posted: Tue, 29th Jul 2003, 5:28pm

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MATT PUGH

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CURTAIN. I don't accept Lee Chalish becuase he or she doesn't give critisism. All Lee does is talk crap to me about the way I like to type. So there is no way in hell I'd accept Lee, at least not untill some acual critisism is written to me. So Lee you really have no point in anything you say to me accept trying to start a fight. Which is cool with me if that's what you really want.


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Posted: Wed, 30th Jul 2003, 7:18pm

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Ok… at first I was only going to give it one star but I really enjoyed the over-dramatic music and bumped it up to two stars and then I saw the fedora and had to throw in a bonus star!... Not enough hats in movies these days - we need more hats!

Sound, lighting, a new coat of paint…bla, bla, bla… I'm sure you already know all that, at least your first movie didn’t have a weak over-used lightsaber duel like just about everybody else’s first movie (including my own)
Posted: Thu, 31st Jul 2003, 8:20am

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CurtinParloe

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Thanks Zuko, little did I know when I bought that hat 6 years ago that it was a good idea smile

Paul